something quiet about your speechmoves through my hands and to my feet
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Tuesday, November 06, 2007

 Words' Worth

They are delicate as the spider's web, and just as troublesome.
Though forthwith and brave, they are as tender as your skin,
moving to the weight of my fingers as I embellish
you with mine own lines; and,
consequentially, my words.
Though they move and they break apart, they
lack a certain luster that only the sun can
give something like the water -- an aliveness
lit up and waving as waves do weave
through the wading water.
I do not want to use words, lest they be stricken
with gravity and collapse under themselves like
lungs unable to strain longer -- or they ricochet and
in frenzy they are lost, devoid of
direction or meaning -- and,
consequentially, meaning nothing.
I do not want to recite to you songs that have been already sung,
lyrics that have already been played, music, poems,
stories told, actions been acted, scenes been seen,
lies that have been laid as heavy a burden on you
as I ever would wish you endure.
I am at a crossed road, and stand I here at this section
inspired but unmoved, impassioned but not spurred,
empowered, not charging, not seizing, not open nor awake.
Were you to simply request that I love you,
I would give,
wordlessly, and delicately.

 Posted 11/6/2007 12:08 PM - 27 Views - 8 eProps - 10 comments

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this is fucking amazing, you definitely said something just now that ive never really heard or seen anyone else say, and you said it with such raw eloquence, its just fucking amazing. its my new favorite thing ever.
Posted 11/6/2007 2:44 PM by shinypajamas - reply

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it really is beautiful.
i love the imagery.
imagry?
mer.
Posted 11/6/2007 5:11 PM by x_no_compromise_x - reply

dear william,

this is what you belong doing, not writing about letters from creepy mystery men. i don't have to say it for you to know i love you, and this is why. because you write shit like this. :o)

sincerely,
me.
Posted 11/7/2007 2:09 AM by julie - reply

I want to hear you read it. To my eyes/ears there are a few line breaks I'd move and word changes I'd consider.

-Whit-
Posted 11/7/2007 3:32 AM by whit - reply

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come to school with me tomorrow.
there is a boy coming to be in my little brother's class.
and i think you and i would be good friends with him.
Posted 11/8/2007 4:03 PM by x_no_compromise_x - reply

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beautiful.
Posted 11/8/2007 7:30 PM by peasblossomsfaerie Xanga True Member Xanga Lifetime Member - reply

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where do you begin?
Posted 11/12/2007 6:08 PM by x_no_compromise_x - reply

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it depends on what is sweeping you away.

sometimes it is sweet surrender.

other times it is simply fatigue and chaos.
Posted 11/13/2007 10:23 PM by x_no_compromise_x - reply

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great stuff [especially the ending]

keep writing!  I'd love to read more!

Posted 11/25/2007 10:20 PM by suchtemerity - reply

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i should say the same to you, hypocrite. :)
Posted 4/8/2009 4:47 PM by shinypajamas - reply


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